Hi, John:

I, too, like the 5/4 rendition, but I suggest some slight change to emphasis the 3+2 pattern.

I took the liberty of making a couple of changes to the opening bars to illustrate what I mean. I think that just the little things I did here make the ear want to hear the 5/4 pattern more and lead the listener toward the next downbeat.

One thing I have noticed is that, when I am writing a song that is in an irregular meter, I usually don't realize it until it comes time to notate it. If it's going to work, then it should flow without thinking about it.

Have fun.

David

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